First Sight
So CC showed me a bright, white cave. Inside was a fairy’s houses. Out came a very,very,very nice looking male fairy: ” Hello! I’m a eraser fairy. So I saw a mistake you made and erased it.” “By the way, I’m MT. ” said the fairy. ” I’m a rainbow fairy.” I said. ” and my name is GR. CC noticed that I talked weird.
” You like MT, don’t you?” said CC after breakfast that day. ” I sort of do… anyway it was first sight.” I muttered. CC was really,really surprised to hear that! Because MT was CC’s crush’s (ED) friend! So I went to see CP (future fairy). “Hello. Why are here, GR.” said CP. “Do you know MT?” I asked ” Yes. Why did you ask? Huh?” said CP. “Because he did something for me today.” I replied. “Why don’t you stay for lunch and talk about it.” suggested CP. “Okay.” I said.
Grace, after “and my name is GR.” it should be like that. You need this at the end of people talking”
“Why are you here GR?” it should be like that. It need a ?.
A good beginning.